Wednesday, August 27, 2008

lost...

rain....
strands of rain..
like a shadow
like a cold embrace

she traced her fingers on the windshield of the car. the fogged windows, the lines made by the water drops...

the paper boat
the drenched white petticoat
the long lost childhood
she sat back, lost in the rain

he looked out, trying to make out the penetrating yellow light beams. the winding road. The sleeping tea beds on the roads sides, enclosed in the blanket of mist.

warmth of a coffee mug
fresh Jasmin flowers after the rain...
the wet umbrellas
the overflowing paddy fields

the traveler he was. the crazy paths he trampled. the slow moving cars, the old man with a black umbrella. the stacked logs on the side of a roadside hotel. the lorrys stopped for rest. the gentle kiss of his leg against the throttle pedal. the soft feel of raindrops against his stubble.

the silence is more heavy
than the weight of a thousand words
she looking out, lost in the rain
he looking out, trying to find himself

and they - they traveled along, in different tangents but bonded by the physical presence...

the flowering grapevines...
the rain draped mountains...
and the long winding road, lost in mist...

12 comments:

Winnie the poohi said...

Ah the way you have brought it to life is amazing! the expression u have used...

the silence is more heavy
than the weight of a thousand words


the flowering grapevines...
the rain draped mountains

is just too good!

I liked the idea of parallel world they experience..

And the expressions like traced finger on the fogged windows.. passed the old man with an umbrella.. make it more real!

I still feel it shud b totally in prose or totally in poem.. but this unique style make it more spontaneous :)

Ria said...

hmmm makes me feel so nostalgic and also makes me feel like getting wet in the rain. This time its hardly rained in Mumbai! :( Hw sad.

*~*{Sameera}*~* said...

Lovely!Awesome imagery :)

The rain has its own charm.

Preeti said...

How do u do tat anoo!

Really nice :) unlike mine ;)

gunj said...

dat was awesome!! really:)

Enigma said...

ahh i see a new look to the blog...well must b coz i am bac after so long

♪♪HARINI♪♪ said...

it actually reminded me of barso re.. the first part.. really nice, n i liked the way you wrote it and the picturisation involved with the boat..

ceedy said...

where is this "imagined"?

well written

--xh-- said...

@winnipoohi: thnx da, for teh detailed analysis :)
@ria: :)
@sameera: thanks :)
@preetz: :) thnx sweetz
@gunj: :)
@enigma: :) welcome back
@harini: :) thnx da
@ceedy: no where in particular.. saw a photo in one blog - of a rainy,mist clad road and cars with foglamps... that was teh seed.

ceedy said...

@xh
kewl...was very descriptive so thougt you might have experienced it :)

Suma said...

very very nicely expressed...:)

Pretty Me!! said...

this is so alive !!!! loved it dude :)